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Wait... who died? The friend or boyfriend? You say "he" in the first lines and keep repeating the "he." Not them, he. So... if both the friends died, then you ...

"I'm going to cut off your balls," the man said, his voice sounding hoarse and gravelly. He gavea laugh and walked closer to James... Closer... The knife raised...

"25. I think you may be getting bored by now." Of course you don't think that! We're riveted! :)

Eh... I've seen better poetry from you. Because I'm a grammarian at heart... ;) "And it’s clothes" should be "And its clothes." Why? Because the apostrophe indicates the contraction of ...

Er... let's not go there. Seriously.

It won't work. The pre function is really terrible here. The best thing you can do is to seperate the paragraphs by putting a space between them. A little bit ...

Still, math is awesome. For our math class today, our teacher sliced up an orange to show us about the area. We were computing the areas of stuf, including spheres, ...

:P Well, what made you want to get attacked by elephants anyway?

Writing is awesome. :) And hanging around the mall is stupid, unless you have the money. Or even if you do, the prices are so high that it might just ...

Psh! She has writer's block now. But perhaps soon we'll see her work. :)

Pretty stuff! :)

I think this part is a little clichéd: I cant afford for you to leave me I cant afford to lose my kiss from the only girl I will ever ...

Yay! I like short pithy poetry. It's really pretty when it's done well. :) I thought this line was a little strange: "And you must listen." You're talking about eyes, ...

Does this poem have anything to do with leaving childhood and becoming an adult? It's very pretty. I like the second version better. It just... looks better. But I would ...

The word "shoes" doesn't really rhyme with "mongoose" or "loose." I would look in a rhyming dictionary (you can find them online now!) to find a better word. And "butt" ...