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10/10, because the bible is pretty. :) I first thought it was from psalms, lol.

"Miss Lucy" played by Pete Fountain

What in the world does [sic] mean when it's placed after a word?

hi sam...erm...this is...different. I can't say as it's my favorite thing you've ever written, but I have confidence that it will grow steadily better. And yeah...new title definately in order. ...

I think the fourth stanza is misplaced. I would rather see the third and fifth stanzas together than third, fourth, and fifth. I don't know... it seems to be misplaced. ...

Er... yeah. I love making fun of poems like this. I think you should submit something else in the writing contest. Generally, people don't go for this kind of stuff ...

^ Is one of the reviewers of YWS! *high fives*

And then there's me, and goodness knows, I'm a n00b. :P

I bumped into a member. "Oh... hi...!" What was her name again? "...Haze!" She blinked. "It's Emma now." What the...? Suddenly Fontroy ran into me.

Ooo... nice introduction. Topics I want to see expanded? "In these video games, the character is supposedly allowed to play out our innermost desires, which are then informed or, in ...

I like ice cream... with pickles. Are you pregnant?

As you take you very first step. Aw... how cute. But... it should be "As you take your very first step." Notice the your... They have no mercy for the ...

^ JESUS WAS GOTHER THAN YOU

It's Jesus'. I know... you're supposed to put an s after every singular possesive subject, but for the case of ancient godly dudes, the s is omitted. Trust me on ...

Ah... a story with some resemblence to a plot... what a relief. The narrator: The narrator is confused. Her life has just been turned upside down. Her dad's moving away ...