Snoink

8/10 because Google rocks!

Okay, I've looked it over. I'm not going to bother you with all the grammar mistakes, but I will tell you this. You have a lot of comma splices or ...

AHH! WHY DO YOU TYPE SO SMALL?????????????? *grumbles and copies and pastes it on Word*

^ Makes me twitch. *twitch*

STYLE Okay, first of all, the grammar stuff above was just how things are. This is me being a little nitpicker. So feel free to ignore any of the advice ...

^ Has complimented me. :shock:

She's in New Zealand. The rules may be different there.

8/10, because it's a catchy tune.

It's strange how much levels of emotions humans are aware of. We know fear, we know love, we know kindness, and it affects us greatly. If a father yells at ...

^ Knows Japanese!

My dad works directly with the dept. of homeland security. We know what violence is, lol. yeah, you know what violence is, but im going to be dollars to doughnuts ...

GRAMMAR I know what you're thinking now. "I have this story that needs help, and the first thing that Snoink is paying attention to is the grammar before she even ...

Or earthquakes. :? My mom walked in my room today and said that Hurricane Karina hit it. XP I expect a round of bad jokes...

Yes, you're right Sarah. The reason why I decided to continue writing was because the toughest critiquer I know actually said one of my stories was good. :shock: Could you ...

I... knew that.