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Re: Swan Song (4)
Oh! I get what you're saying! I think she's trying to match his weird behavior with something recognizable to her. So, it would be like saying, "That girl in class ...
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Re: The May Day Review Day Check-In Thread
Let's do it!
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Re: Winterland.
Hey Jasmine! Okay, this was really weird and maybe a bit too short. Part of me wants to say, "It's too abstract!" and the other part of me wants to ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Swan Song (4)
Eek! I was afraid that would get confusing. White Swans and Black Swans are more like... demigods that look like swans, so they can do some additional stuff that swans ...
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Re: Confused
Hi SassyKat! :D I think it's fine where it is! You didn't really tell a story as much as you expressed feelings and such. So, I think lyric poetry fits! ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Be Quick.
Hello housecat! :D Hmm... you're right! It does feel like there's something missing. I think it's because it's jerky and it doesn't really completely what it wants to say in ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Mirror: Chapter One
OH NOES. *flails* First of all, I liked this chapter sooooo much better. It was like, "OH NO. THIS CAN'T BE HAPPENING!" Which is a good thing to feel in ...
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Re: Mirror prologue
Hey Micki! :D First of all, a couple of typos! “You'll loose braincells if you keep thinking about those things.”
May 1, 2011 -
Re: I'm visiting you mom...
Aw, this is so sad! :( All right, so I don't know if this is based off of a true story or whatever (I hope it isn't!) but I'll pretend ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Deserter - Chapter 2, Part 1 (OUTDATED)
I am not looking forward to finishing this novel. It is so good! :D Just a couple of things! I'm not going to do an overall thing again, because the ...
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Re: Cat Steps (draft)
Hey Rosey! :D Okay, you're going to hate me for saying this, but I actually think you went too fast for this! While it's neat to be dumped in the ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The May Day Review Day Check-In Thread
The numbers are the amounts of points earned by each team!
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Re: The Devil's Pocket Watch (1)
Hey Pink! Just a few nitpicking things first, and then we'll start getting into the meatier parts! “Let me get that for you,” Her father offered, taking hold of her ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Devil's Pocket Watch
Hello, my favorite leader! :D Crosse raised his head while watching a child trip and land in a puddle. His mother lifted him up and around her waist then jogged ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Deserter - Chapter 1 (OUTDATED)
Hey ultraviolet! I found one huge error in this piece that rather bothered me: This is the first draft of my new novel The Deserter. I know it's not that ...
May 1, 2011
