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Hi Warrior Princess! :D Okay, so when I saw the title, I kind of squeed because it reminds me of Stravinsky's "Rite of Spring" and I rather adore that whole ...

Okay, try this: take out the adjectives and adverbs that are not ellipses of noun phrases or proper adjectives or demonstrative adjectives. And I'm saying this because it still seems ...

I'm glad you're not depressed! :o As far as the poem goes, I think it holds a lot of potential! I mean, your character essentially watching someone die from cancer. ...

Hi Monument! I think this poem might have tried too hard as far as bombarding us with images. It looks more like a checklist than a poem because it lists ...

Ooooooooh... a work by BlueAfrica? I want! So, this one was almost realistic except for the fact that it was not nearly long enough. I don't know... little girls don't ...

Hahaha, I think you should stop talking with serious poetry if this is the sort of stuff that you come up with instead. It's quite delightful! It reminds me of ...

Hi Kafka! :D I like the second story better! It has more of an ironic feeling to it, which I kind of adore. The only thing that could possibly make ...

Hey Drecka! :D First of all, you'll want to run a spell check on this! There's a couple of errors in here. ;) Now, for the actual story commentary! :D ...

YAY! This is original and new and innovative and I kind of adore it. :) Just a couple of thoughts or first impressions... 1. I don't like the title. It's ...

Hi Amberla! :D It is short! But short doesn't have to be bad! Still, I have some ideas on how you can expand it... ;) For one, I am a ...

I grew up listening to Rush Limbaugh. I learned from him to question everything, regardless of what people actually said and learned to look at people's actions to things. He ...

Hm... this may be just me, but I am pretty curious as to why this poem came out. It seems pretty confrontational (which I like!) and I am quite curious ...

It's short! ...Nah, don't worry, that wasn't all I was going to say! :D It's a good start, but I would like to see this expanded, if only because I ...

Hi Katie May! I think this might be really cool if we knew that she was dead from the onset. I mean, that would add the whole SHOCK factor and ...

Hi! I actually like the non-silhouette picture of Millie best. She's a cool cat, she is! I think these photos could probably do with some more contrast, especially the last ...