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Haha, I figured as much! But see, what you do first is a free write where you just puke out your emotions on paper. Then you start to construct the ...

Teehee! When I was thirteen, I was awful at placing commas too. :) With that, you'll definitely want to learn where to put commas and such! Anyway! What you're going ...

Hey MilkNCookies! :D Cute story! And a promising introduction besides. :) This reminds me of modern day children's books... and trust me, I love those, lol. Now! Just a couple ...

Right now, you need to figure out what is important about this poem and what isn't. You're throwing all these visual cues toward us as a somewhat hodgepodge of information, ...

Right now, you need to figure out what is important about this poem and what isn't. You're throwing all these visual cues toward us as a somewhat hodgepodge of information, ...

You need to stress the conflict more to give this poem a little more interest. Right now, it seems very bare bones, which isn't altogether bad, but the problem is ...

Dante's Inferno is amazing. :) As far as your poem, it sounds a bit... plain? One of the things I would love to see is more graphic imagery. I mean, ...

I think the first two lines are strange with the rest of the poem. I don't quite like it. Either, I would try to integrate it into the poem more ...

Dude, this only makes me realize how little of a life I have. xD

I'm going to bioengineer a heart now, lol.

This is kind of boring. You don't really tell any stories or story and it's just about this guy being stupid. Of course, you could argue that that was the ...

This really wasn't organized well at all. I'm still confused by what your argument is... you tried to define what "education" is and how to improve it, so you defined ...

The metering was a bit off, but that's okay! :D Still, I like the concept. It's very cute! And, having to deal with these ten-year-old dinosaurs... well... it's very true! ...

Hey Ruby! First, do a quick grammar check and stuff! The word "breathee" is in there! Also, "May realised as she studied the garden that the rain had not only ...

Hi Thomas! So, I don't think the rambling is really problematic here. I like rambling stories. In fact, some of those rambling stories are some of the most awesome stories ...