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Oooh, I liked this poem! It kind of reminded me of Shel Silverstein's poems... and I adore Shel Silverstein. :) It also kind of reminded me of Dr. Seuss's "The ...

Hi Lena! Nate got the spelling and grammar part, so I won't bug you about that! :D Anyway, one of the things I would love to see is you going ...

Awww, so cute! Anyway, one of the things that I wondered about was, this guy is obviously dead, right? And he was meaningful to the girl who is still alive. ...

Hey Lawson! :D So, this format kind of reminds me of the Twilight zone! You have the prologue, where that one guy is talking about the Twilight Zone, then it ...

Hey Eli! I have to say, I have to agree with Abigail here! The poem just fell flat. It seemed like you were writing more of an opinion piece than ...

Hi introvert! :D Hmm... you have a very interesting poem! It kind of reminds me of the old-school romances that I so adore. :D One idea... maybe you can rewrite ...

Aha, the whole pawn situation! I didn't really like it, lol. It was kind of obvious, too obvious for my tastes, and it held a bunch of cliched images. The ...

Denia! I love your first stanza! It's clipped and short and strange and beautiful all at once. Love the talk of Jupiter... it reminds me of Roman mythology! And the ...

Hello Warrior Princess! :D Okay! So first of all, I am a major science geek. XD Anyway, when I was reading your poem, I was first looking for the end ...

Hey Kylan! Your poem is amazing, but I think you knew this already! Anyway, something in the picture caught my eye and you didn't actually mention it in the poem... ...

Hi! First off, a little nitpick I found: For most, they will be able to bear it, but (for some) it will be the start of emptiness that will never ...

This is definitely the stronger part of the story! The ending is particularly interesting. I do think it's weird that he doesn't recognize his character at first, or wonder, "Hmm, ...

I agree with Kyllorac! The word choice was a little off. Make sure you straighten it out! Also, what was especially strange was your combination of a euphemism with a ...

Hi Fantasy! I'm not quite feeling this poem. I mean, it seems mostly like this poem is an excuse to talk say "blank-taker" over and over again. Why does it ...

Hi Persephoneia! :D One thing that I noticed was that this poem really wasn't that confident! Like, you had this metaphor that you wanted to run with, but it seemed ...