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Hey Katherine! :D I like how, in your poem, you combined both your thoughts with physical actions... we know that it is embarrassing when he ignores you and we can ...

Hey Lindabelle! A very beautiful name... literally! ;) First of all, when you wrote "Hey Jude"? That was pretty much the most awesome thing ever. :) My main advice would ...

Hey Tigger! And yes, that is my nickname for you. :P One thing I would really like is to see some sort of conclusion here. I mean, you have all ...

Gah! I love this poem! The nature, the roses, the fantastical imagery, the grand scale scope of everything... in a sense, it's truly epic. And it doesn't hurt that my ...

Months went by; months of me missing SAT testing dates, and months of college deadlines passing me by without my knowledge. Never, ever admit to this if you don't have ...

Mill-en, but I suck at pronunciations. XD By the way! This is moved to writing tips. :)

Hey Allison! Welcome to YWS! Hopefully, you'll get settled down soon and start feeling comfortable enough to comment on other people's works. :) Anyway, I found this really abstract! In ...

Hey THsavedme! Welcome to YWS! :) One of the things that I think you can expand on for this poem is the ambiguity of it! What is consuming her? What ...

We've had several mentorship programs on YWS, all of which have failed miserably once the mentors get bored of being a mentor and the leaders get bored of artificially enticing ...

Friiiiiiiiiies! You posted somehing! :o Abyway, you did make it shiny! But it looks like there is writing on the shiny part and it looks a bit strange... maybe it's ...

Hello sillyducky! I think you should start with the third stanza, actually, and get rid of your first two stanzas. They seem a little unnecessary! Also, and this may just ...

It's true! It's what my signature says, after all... where there is true charity, God is present! :D Unfortunately, God doesn't really seem to exist in this world... we messed ...

Hey imagine! :D One thing I would really like is if you could delve into the drama of this poem. Like, you hint of a forbidden love, but you don't ...

Hey Space Pirate! :D I kind of like this! It's a neat setting! One thing I would really like is more of a story. That is, you got the story, ...

Hello XJ! :D This seems like a rap more than a poem! Not that that's a bad thing... it just is, lol. Anyway, I would really like to see a ...