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Hey Light Devil! Okay, this might just be me, but the beginning is waaaay too gimmicky for me to really get hooked. For the first couple of paragraphs, you implore ...

Hey Ace! I really liked this poem. It's very luscious in its description and action and it doesn't mind being fantastic -- in the fantasy sense. I also really like ...

Hey Rosey! I liked this... Shakespeare uses such beautiful language and you did a good job assembling his lines and putting it together as your own! My main problem with ...

Hey Palladin! :) One thing that I noticed was that your rhymes seemed to trip you up. That is, you seemed so intent on rhyming that you would arrange your ...

Hey mizz! :D Spanish is a beautiful language, isn't it? Anyway, with your story, it seems a little bit odd sometimes! For instance it seems strange that she would be ...

Oooh! I like the character interaction here! Very nicely done. :) Now, as far as your poem, I really, really like how the action tells the story. It reminds me ...

1. Try this! background-image:url(URL_OF_YOUR_IMAGE); background-attachment:fixed; 2. Er... what do you mean? Maybe this is helpful? 5. h1 -->title. My title is "OINK!" so that's what's changing it. :

The "Other" forum doesn't count for critiques!

Hey Huthaifa! First of all! I noticed that this was in "Other." Generally, posts in "Other" don't really get that many replies compared to the other literary forums, so if ...

Greater good... Hot Fuzz? :) Yes, the bubble effect would be popped! In some cases, the greater good would be a bad thing to follow. For instance, sacrificing certain individualities ...

Vaccinations are good. I mean, I know that to some people, they can be very harmful and in fact fatal (I've read in a book of livers that several people ...

Moved to Short Stories!

All fandom goes to Teague * Leonard squinted at the motel and then back at Jesse's impeccable handwriting. According to the note, Jesse would be here. Mentally, Leonard ran through ...

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Thanks for the replies! :D I'm looking to revise this, so it's really helpful! >> Jelly! I have told you how much I love you, haven't I? I'll see what ...