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Hey Sense! Okay, so maybe this is just me, but if a guy did this to me... OMG. It would be bad. Because she's all shy and stuff and then ...

Yay! I might have to skip out a couple of Carl's Jr. lunches, but I totally want that bumper sticker! :o EDIT: Also! For those who are wondering, "Ahhh! What's ...

It's perfectly okay to repost it again, especially considering the amount of work that you've put into this draft! :) What a rotten owner! I think you would have been ...

Eek, Zibbie! I think you're off-topic. The paradox of progress means that the more we progress, the more we have complications related to our progression which ends up inhibiting us. ...

LOL! I love how she grabs her dad's pistol... that's just awesome! Anyway, the main thing is I would really like a more exciting introduction, if that makes sense. We ...

I think the coding for that would be prohibitive.

Also! To develop this poem more, as far as the mathematical romance theme you have going on here... check out this: It has a bunch of ridiculous (yet hilarious!) pick ...

Hi Silented! I really like the math parts and I wish you would continue more of the math! Like... you go from addition to fractions to algebra. OMG. And then! ...

Hey tgolden! I voted "kind of." That is, I really love Spanish in poetry. I do! Spanish poetry is what brought me into poetry in the first place! However, I ...

Hey, I can't help it if I taste like bacon. ;) Woooooo! Free hugs! :D I think you click "subscribe to topic." It should be on the very top of ...

That's because capitalization counts! Next time, capitalize it. :P

Hey Unknown! The main problem is that this pretends to be witty when it really isn't. Better poets have constructed her crazier un-poems than this with more imagination and daring ...

I don't think the French thing is a problem. But Jas having two avvies... now that's a bit odd!

Dude, you had me at sparkly magical ponies. Welcome to YWS, oh strange one! Remember! Cannibalism is strictly not allowed. So AVOID EATING THE SWINE.

I suppose I could get more help if I posted the rest of the story, though? :P Hahaha! Trust me, if this means you'll post more, I'll say yes. :P ...