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Hey Sarebear! :D First of all, I really like the jagged feeling of this... the poem is written in such a way that it is evident that the one hiking ...

Hey babymagic! :D Right now, you've started at a rather odd place! Most people would start at the beginning of the battle scene, not at the end. Mind you, it's ...

Ooh, interesting story! :D A couple of things... I actually think that it would be better to start with a sex scene in the beginning. Why? First of all, it's ...

Ooh, I liked this. :D A couple of comments... I really don't like the hanging word that you have on every one of your stanzas. I would kill it, if ...

Hey Hannah! I just found this. Soooo... I figured I would critique it! :P The dialogue is rather bleh. I generally like to see more action in between the dialogue, ...

Hey Tenyo! :D Sooooo... this piece. XD Yeah, basically, life doesn't translate well to fiction. What was that cliche... "stranger than fiction"? However, I think that you're pressing a little ...

Hey confused.pirate! Interesting idea! :D Now! Let's make it poetic! One of the cool things about poetry is that it's like the Looney Tunes... anything can happen! So instead of ...

Ahhh! My worst nightmare! Nah, just kidding. ;) Anyway, this story was interesting! I don't know though... starting off with a dream sequence sounds like kind of a cop-out for ...

Hey stelagineva! :D I like your title a lot and the whole idea of being so in love that you just want to die... it's an interesting (albeit, masochistic) idea. ...

Hey shizunarui! Welcome to YWS! :D Your story is very dramatic! It seems rather like a soap opera, in fact. This isn't necessarily a bad thing though... I definitely like ...

Hello BeautifulDoom! :D So, Bondgirl was right as far as the beginning goes! You're kind of contradicting yourself, so if you continue with this piece, you'll definitely want to edit ...

Hey allmixedup! :D First of all, there's a couple of typos in here that you can fix! For instance, "stutter" is spelled as "studder" and other typos. So just run ...

Hey Vitamin! :D The first picture is gorgeous, mostly because of the vibrancy of the flower and the fact that you only highlighted one side, which made our eyes automatically ...

Hey Hawkie! :D First of all, nice images! I loved the specific images that you used... it helped formed a concrete image in my mind, which is always good! Now, ...

Hey Jane! :D A good story... really! Very true and poignant, especially in times like these. Plus, it's written well, which is always a bonus. ;) My main advice for ...