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Read "The Man Who Was Thursday: A Nightmare." It's a wonderful book and it'll show you how to do really good (and realistic) dream sequences. I think it'll really help ...

I'm not quite sure what is going on in high schools nowadays, but instead of having some sort of purely "sex-ed" thing, I think you should require a health class. ...

A kind of gritty, informal style. I've read things like what your style doesn't seem very firm or as strong as it could be yet because you're not quite getting ...

Hey Demetri! This story is a little bit weird! The sounds "Ahahaha-ahaughhaughhaughaha-AHAHAHA" and "Oh, Charlie, Oh Charlie, OhCharlieOhCharlieOh…Chaaaarrrllliiieeee" make it sound quite humorous,

Hey Kammara! :D First of all, a couple of typos! If your cruel and selfish, just for you to please,

Hey Makar! This has all the elements of an assigned poetry review, which I am supposing it is! And this is something of a good thing because I bet this ...

Hey bhoutris! :D This sounds very much like the beginning of a scary video game with lots of zombie werewolves and such! I probably wouldn't play it, but I'm not ...

Yay! Epic fantasy is epic! And it's great to have you on YWS... our poet/story writer combos generally turn out to be our best writers, especially as they grow on ...

Hey Emma Miller! So, this seems more like a grocery list of things that you enjoy from someone. Which is good, for a start, but you're definitely going to want ...

Hey jemjive! :D I think this would be awesome if, instead of just telling us about the scar that you have, you would tell us how and why you got ...

Aw, math class is fun though! :D I've seen you around critiquing works! It's great to see you out on YWS. :) Also, if you need any help with your ...

Hey BigM! First of all, a nitpick! Weeds convert carbon dioxide to oxygen as well! In fact, most of the oxygen produced on this Earth is by grass... which is ...

I can't stop my fingers from trembling. Hold them straight, flat, in front of my face and watch them dance out of rhythm. And I'm not sure why--I can only ...

Dude, that elephant is one of the coolest things about YWS! :D Nah, you don't have to critique twenty times... though if you want to, feel free! :D But! I ...

Dam Beavery straight! :D