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This is so #^%#&ing exciting!

The basic rule of thumb is if you find yourself thinking more about the style and less about the story, you're paying too much attention to the wrong thing. Concentrating ...

Another question. How does one avoid the "token" minority in a story? The same way you avoid any token characters... develop them properly.

Hey Violet June! I read this the other day, but didn't comment because I was kind of blown away! The second section made me kind of squirmy, which is totally ...

Hey Emma Louise! :D I like the contrast between rich and poor, especially when you state how lonely she is, yet how envied it she is anyway! It really sends ...

Hey Howler! Babies are indeed cute! :D With that said, the one thing that I found kind of annoying about this poem was how self-centered it is. I don't know... ...

Hey Inkwell! The thing about this poem is that each stanza contains a completely new idea that you could probably expand into a completely different poem, if that makes sense. ...

Hey StoryWeaver! This is a really cute poem! Very Shel Silverstein-esque (trust me, that's a good thing!) so I really like it! Now, to make this more magical, I think ...

Hey Lancelot! Interesting beginning! I like how it dumps us right in the conflict... it's a good thing and I'm glad you're not waiting around for anything! :D One of ...

Aw, this is kind of a cute poem! :) To make it more geared for children (since it totally reminds me of a children's poem), try making this message more ...

My name is Sam! Sam I am! I do not like... Haha, just joking. ^^ A couple of things: Part of me likes the style, another part (the part that ...

The problem with that sort of mindset is that long reviews aren't always helpful and short reviews aren't always unhelpful. Frankly, some of the longer reviews are tediously repetitious. And ...

Hey jackle! Welcome to YWS! :D This is a very packed poem! Which is a completely awesome thing, don't get me wrong! But you could write an entire poem out ...

Awesome story! I liked it lots... it reminded me of "Nosotros los pobres" for some reason. :) A quick story! Apparently, my grandma grew up in New York at a ...

Hey Lord Anzius! This story would probably best fit a movie! Right now, it seems really random that he suddenly dies and such... a great, action-packed scene for the beginning ...