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Hey Olya! Nice poem! I liked the lyricism of it and how it flowed. The rhyming wasn't forced and the descriptions were apt. Very good! The main thing I would ...

XD Ending = WIN. Anyway, what I would probably do with this poem is to make it lead a little bit better! Right now, it's really quite random... I would ...

Hey Lily! This reminded me of some of the poems that you would find in a book of children's poems. Nothing wrong with that -- I kind of grew up ...

Choose soon, lol!

Hey fixed! Welcome to YWS! :D I think my favorite part about this poem was the last stanza, where you started talking about (specifically!) what you would miss from summer. ...

Hey, herzing! Welcome to YWS! If you have any problems, feel free to contact me for anything you want. :) Ooh... you want brutality? Awesome! ^_^ Okay... quick nitpick! In ...

Hey Kat! Welcome to YWS! :D The spoiler part ruined it for me. xD Every time I started to read the poem, I would get attracted to that silly spoiler ...

I really think this poem belongs more in the dramatic poetry than the lyric poetry. :P However, you should note that as long as we each give a critique to ...

Hey July! First of all, welcome to YWS! If you need any help with ANYTHING, feel free to bug me. :) Your poem was lovely! I love the description of ...

*Moved to Lyrics*

Hey Corwin! I think Empress is right on the money when she says that this seems to be more of lyrics than lyric poetry, so if you want me to ...

This wasn't as exciting as I thought it would be D: I was hoping for a toe race. Psh, this is the internet. No room for running!

Hey Caged Heart! :D Welcome to YWS (since I am pretty sure I haven't welcomed you yet)! Your poem was a little odd! At first it was sweet, and then ...

Hey Warrior Princess! :D I actually really liked this poem! It was rhyming and in a weird way, which totally reminded me of Alice In Wonderland ... always a good ...

Unorthodox comments for the win! XD I kind of agree with everybody here. I like your other poem a million times more, but this one is okay and I want ...