Snoink

Half-werewolf? I thought you were either full werewolf or nothing. :P Nah, it's your story. Some of it was a bit strange... the parts you described, it sounded like the ...

Hey Quippie! First of all, the poem's text is hideously small. I can barely read it. I don't know if this is your attention (maybe you don't want me to ...

Of course not. If you did that, I would be disappointed. Subtlety is key here. But I would like to see more of the girl's character than her just giggling ...

Stop telling us what it won't do and focus on what it does do! Focusing on what it doesn't do doesn't give us a clear picture of the storm, how ...

The good thing is, this thing is short and sweet! Unfortunately, when we read this poem, we finish it and think, "Okay... now what?" You don't really give us enough ...

Hey Corwin! Welcome to YWS! If you need any help, just PM me. I'm terrible at reviewing lyrics, sadly. I am pretty much tone deaf. But I'm glad to have ...

PSH. John Mayer will never be as awesome as John Lennon. Will's got it right... listen to him! :D Anyway, welcome to YWS! I'm Snoink. Do you, by chance, happen ...

One of the things that I think is missing is us knowing whether he's dead in the first place. If he is dead, then lose the "followed" in "Behind her, ...

Banned for wearing bunny slippers on YWS! No shoes, no service. Duh.

LOL! You kids are crazy! And of course, it amuses me that captain.classy gives a full review... of course! YWS has trained you well. :P One thing: She praised my ...

Hello! I'm glad to see YWS is better to navigate this year. We did a recent remodeling of it, so it looks completely new. :) Hopefully you'll be able to ...

Selfish thread? I'm in! :D The Completely Evil Radio Show Best. Prank. Ever. But that was kind of a co-write... I mean, I made most of it, but not all ...

Hi Katie! Figured I would critique this one. :) Anyway, for the most part, I really liked the poem. Some of it was a little strange, of course. For instance, ...

Next time, just ask a mod to move the thread for you. ;) I moved your original thread to the Dramatic Poetry forum. *Locked*

Did somebody say brutal? :D I'm confused! It would be better to describe who this witch is, what role she played in the story, and why she would kill the ...