Snoink

Banned for having less than five percent of her total posts be critiques!

Haha, my signature is soooo old. It has a heart over the i, though the heart has turned into more of a pig hoof. I do the same thing as ...

Atlas Shrugged, by Ayn Rand

Make him love something.

So you've got a lot of excellent critiques for this, which is good! I'm going to link to you a couple of writing tutorials that I thought of when I ...

At the moment the words came out of my father’s mouth, I felt a hard, sharp pain in my stomach This part of the sentence was all right. It has ...

True story! Once, I was walking and I saw a lost dog sign that said "Chloe." Not knowing how to pronounce the dog's name, but wanting to help, I wandered ...

Hello! First of all, welcome to YWS! This story reminds me a lot of my diary entry for September 11, 2001, so you definitely get credit for that. :) It ...

Bump!

Today is Jennafina's birthday! And I think she's FINALLY home (she was gone for a while), which means that she can totally read this. XD Happy birthday, sweetie-cake! :D

Hello BBB! I used to be really into gemology, so this will be a weird critique that may be on a tangent sometimes. But that might be a good thing! ...

First of all, hello! Second of all, critique! :D I remember...

I've heard "hook us up" like Exialac... never heard of "boot" though. So not in Northern California.

I'm going to be honest and say that when I first looked at this I couldn't believe it was a story that someone who's *checks* 21 would write, then the ...

Now that's the sort of stuff they should be teaching us in Science, not the Periodic table! But! But! First you need to know about the periodic table in order ...