Snoink

Psh. Everybody but Mesh forgot about my twin brother. :P

Okay! I am back! :D I didn't really do a good job last time (sorry about that!) so I'm just going to critique through the poem being a lot more ...

I don't like it, but fortunately, I don't do real world stories, so it works out. :D

Eek! This is so cute. *stars* There are only three lines that don't really make sense with the rest of the poem: She turns toward home To keep the ancient ...

Okay! It's waaaaaay too late here, so this critique will probably make no sense, but when I read your poem, it reminded me of this other poem that I absolutely ...

Well... it's two o'clock in the morning, so anything I write will suck. Still, this is how I would approach your description: The cement was cold. It bit my through ...

XD It sounds fun! But it's likely that it won't be possible, knowing that I'm taking organic chemistry and fluid mechanics at the same time. But... well... it sounds fun. ...

Just a quick note... you can totally use the f-word in your poems and stories, so don't worry about that, and don't censor yourself, if that's the word that really ...

Eek! Nice poem. But before I start complimenting it and everything, let me introduce myself, seeing as you're new and such! :D I'm Snoink, and basically I'm on YWS waaaaaay ...

First of all, welcome to YWS! :D I'm a moderator, which means that if you need any help at all on YWS, you can always contact me and I'll do ...

Hm. Interesting poem! What I like the most is that you touch on the whole dehumanizing of a person. That is, you go from relatively simple remarks and bring it ...

Eek, this was not as good as I would normally expect from you. The part I liked was this: [quote]When I set your soul free, you flew away from me ...

Haha, this was a fun poem. ^^ That is... I liked it because of the allusions to history and the very ironical way it was written. So let's go through ...

Nice poem! :D *stars* This may just be me, but I think I would like it better without the first three stanzas. The beginning of the fourth stanza ("O Warrior, ...

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