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Aww! *pats head* But yay! This is slightly exciting!

No it isn't, lol. Nate made a big fuss about it when I told him... and yeah, he's correct. XD

1.If I sent you to look for yourself at twelve o'clock, and you returned as yourself arrived, but not before you left at one o'clock , should I keep you ...

The empty space beside me Once housed the most inspiring soul

For some reason, when I read your poem, I thought of Allen Ginsberg's America (watch out for the F-word). Yep. One huge difference between your poem and that poem is ...

Much closer! :D This critique will probably be shorter, since you are definitely improving, and probably with less helpful advice, because as you get closer to writing a solid poem, ...

Banned for not having 15 more reviews.

freakforchrist is by far my favorite member. I never had to PM her about something she stupid she said or one lined critiques or her misspellings or her chat speak ...

XD I would probably stick with the first line and then throw everything else out. Why? Well, first of all, I am an evil poet. But! But! I would replace ...

It sounds like you're working on this still, so I guess I'll critique! :P PROLOGUE It sucks. Get rid of it. CHAPTER 1 The argument between the mom and the ...

Hola! I am Shiva, destroyer of worlds. Or, alternatively, Snoink, destroyer of poetry. But you knew that... I am just being silly. Anyway! Let's look over your poem, shall we? ...

You keep on repeating the word crazy, yet it doesn't really seem crazy. In fact, and this sounds weird, but it sounds normal . Crazy, isn't it? ;) So I ...

Aha! It's been edited! :D You're closer to achieving the effect you want, actually. Let's look at the poem, shall we? ;) I am afraid for my life. My father ...

Yay! I get to critique your poem. :) Now, quickly! I am considered one of the brutal critiquers of YWS. Why? Because I am really really picky on what I ...

Hahahahahha! This is awesome! But... the conversation is not over yet. You must expand on this! I love your characters and they're awesome and OMG. You should totally do more ...