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:P This poll hurts my head.

You're going to want to describe exactly what this journey is and how it takes her back in the same place. That's an interesting sort of story, mind you, and ...

It seems really random. At first, you have leaves and I thought you were going to tie that in with the imagery at the end, but you don't. Instead, you ...

Poetry is not having every couple of words spaced like this. In fact this is annoying to read and there's really no poetry involved. No, seriously, line breaks are not ...

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I didn't have enough points for them. XD Later, I ended up with 80K points... and they were gone. Go figure. :P

...you do realize that most of us aren't published writers? :lol:

Either or? If it's more techno-y, I would put it in the sci fi section and if it's more classical, I would put it in the fantasy section. If it's ...

The word "il" is actually "the" in Italian, describing a masculine object, such as a maestro. So no, not a typo. ^^

How old are these people? They seem to be in high school since they act like awkward teenagers to each other, yet they are dealing with hearts and whatnot, so ...

Wait.... what? This prologue doesn't really make sense. At all. Throw away this prologue and come up with the interesting story instead. This doesn't tell you anything, it doesn't inspire ...

Crimson Tear. It sounds cooler. ^_^

I shall join! Name: Richard (known as Dirty Dick, or Dick for short) Age: 31 Gender: male Occupation: First Mate Bio: He was keelhauled when he was a sailor for ...

I don't think he would be able to cry. It just doesn't make sense.

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