Snoink

Your Mom should be proud of this. Who knows? Maybe it'll even make her cry! :P

Interesting... *smiles and backs away*

I look at my reflection in the mirror and it weeps though I do not. These lines are flipping amazing! You should use them to your full advantage. :D I ...

*LOCKED*

I think you're focusing too much on the rhyme and not enough on the story. Give us full details on the juicier parts of what is happening as this poem ...

Don't come here now for sunshine and warmth. Don't come here now for good cheer round the hearth.

A question before I respond to this poem: is this written for a story? :) It seems to be like one of those prophecy things, that's why I had to ...

When you first start out, you say, "I don't know why" about the brother's gun, so it seems random when he starts shooting people. Also, even though it's written in ...

This is a incredibly repetitious poem. It repeats the same idea again and again, slamming the message mercilessly in the reader's face. Try coming up with a specific event to ...

*Moved to Fantasy Fiction*

I think it would be cool if there were different breeds of werewolves. ^_^

She was only 11 years old when he found her Her youth showed in her eyes

First time. Lead by a hand, through a door. Sh-sh-shaking, so nervous, nails nibbled raw. Mind racing, heart pounding.

Unwilling to leave, Yet unable to stay.

*Moved to The Lounge*