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I have glasses, but they're really really light prescription and most times, I just do without because I can see farther away better without them. I only use them when ...

Yeah, sometimes that has happened to me. Just close the browser and try again... and again... and again... :lol:

Now, you need to get to a thousand reviews. ;)

Some really nice stuff here! When I read and critique poetry, I tend to read it out loud, and it wasn't completely unsmooth when I read it, which is very ...

FINALLY. :P

Oooooh, I see what you're trying to accomplish. But there's "Fluffy Bread Tanka" up there too, which probably isn't a good thing.

Desire should come before shame.

:D

1) Carl needs to have testosterone implants. Seriously. Carl in my mind looks like this: 2) The woman reminds me of the people who go to Wal-Mart. Poor [s]Kenneth[/s] Carl. ...

Ouch. People are stealing from the government in the worst ways possible. O_o

Hehe, you had some pretty amusing typos. ^_^ He had short gelled black hair and pail white skin. pail = You want pale. :) Get a holed of yourself Sam... ...

It's too vague to be really powerful. Right now, you have a rambling, image-less poem and there seems to be no feeling involved. Take a deep breath. What do you ...

Lol! Well, vagueness can be used for good, not evil, and in this case it's good. SoIthink it's more of a judgment call, and you just have to be very ...

I like the beginning, because it is slightly ambiguous. Instead of telling us exactly what is happening, you use details that are not too specific and we can form our ...

The main qualm I had is it seems to be the Judeo-Christian God that you're talking about, and yet you never mention Jesus at all. Which is weird, because the ...