Snoink

1) Do not comment on your poem. I deleted that post. 2) Poems that have smilies in them should be kicked into submission. Why? Smilies are cheesy. And they make ...

At last! Something in this section I can really sink my teeth into! Can't speak as to when I'll be done, but would you prefer a posted or PMed critique? ...

I like to have my instant messengers on, and then I'll rant to people about how sucky my writing is, and they'll tell me to shove it and continue writing. ...

Twit's right. The first example that you had made me twitch and want to curl up and die. ;) I made this... hopefully it'll be helpful?

This is showing because, instead of saying, "her father had precise ideas about cigarettes," it is describing his ideas about it, and so on. So, even though the narrative is ...

If you want, you can always instant message me. I love idea brainstorming, but I prefer to do it in real time. ;)

XD Love it! And perfect subject matter... ;)

The reason why it's not working is because it's too rushed. You spent all this time talking about dresses, using all these bloated adjectives and everything to describe it, but ...

Go through an agent.

I think I scared all of my members... but still! Fun stuff! XD

This has several conflicting messages. The narrator hates life and yet he would be perfectly happy if he goes to another place? Confusing! So this guy obviously doesn't really hate ...

EDIT: Bam! It's gone! :D ORIGINAL POST: By popular request, here it is in .rtf form. Unzip it to see it!

EDIT: FREAK is gone! I told you it was for a limited time only. :P Anyway, it's been downloaded 62 times and I've gotten nine critiques, so I am somewhat ...

I have to agree with kittykat. Maybe it's the several days I've spent of editing a story, but there seem like a lot of unnecessary words that were not too ...

Snoink: Oh, I know. Now he has it all up and pretty. But the fact that he didn't have it then on his site when I looked is slightly disconcerting ...