Snoink

Dude, you're not coming back permanantly? Awww... is it because I smell bad? And chapter outlines are lovely. Really.

But I adore your trash! Really.. I mean, if you think the Chair is not up to standards, then obviously your trash is my treasure, lol.

Holy... this is awesome!

Moved to Narrative Poetry! :D

Please, no unoriginal songs here. *moved to Entertainment*

I don't know about this. It took me a little while to get through the first paragraph because it was so repetitious. Which isn't necessarily bad, especially in humorous works ...

I couldn't really see it, actually. Perhaps I am blind. But, though you talked about eyes and hearts, that was about it. I think it would be pretty awesome if ...

*is flagged* Moved to the lounge!

Unfortunately, this poem is too true. *stabs 43* With that said, I think the second line is a little wordy and I would probably trim it a little. I think ...

Pat!

Aw shucks. You took it down. :( Well, I'm going to lock it as it's not really a story now, but if you want to post it back up, feel ...

Seventh, stupid, redundant, immure, bantering. Yes. We hate that very much. This is better than your previous work, but it's still not good and you're not putting as much effort ...

The rhymes are forced and, because you are concentrating on rhyming so much, there is no meaning behind the poem. Throw this away and try again. You can do better.

I don't think this works. I mean, first of all, you're telling us this. And, from the description you give us, we're supposed to feel sorry for the girl. Unfortunately, ...

Hahaha... I play Word. O_o *is lame*