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The narrator of the poem actually seems pretty biased. He's pointing out all these shallow things and then he points out to us that, lo, her heart is gold. But ...

Sue me. I thought it was a fiction story at first. So I was looking at the dialogue and the description coming with the lines with the dialogue, thinking, "Wow, ...

If I were in your shoes, I would choose a nice chocolate bar. That would be good. As it is, it is a little vague. For instance, you say that ...

...does anyone know how to do this?

It has... slightly. Because it used to be very very close and now it's not. But I have critiqued a little and so it should be closer.

Wait- why is she trying to sell her baby? Who is she selling it to? This is so CREEPY!! :( Poor, poor baby. To a publisher, of course.

This is pretty. Edit it, if you must, but as it is, it's a lovely poem.

I like this part, because it actually talked about what the main character did rather than just her feelings: 'Jenny, Jenny, Jenny is dead. Murdered by someone, with a guilty ...

This poem is all about the narrator. Unfortunately. Masks may be a good image, but it depends on the mask. If I use my incredibly wild imagination, the "you" in ...

Awwww... so cute! This poem makes me want to snuggle it.

Hehe... ;)

This is an info dump. Keep it, for your own information purposes, but don't use it in your story. Start with chapter one, with your characters and plot, and describe ...

Okay. I shall critique the prologue. Ready? Set? Go! “No,” The woman gasped, “What are you doing?” A man walked towards her with a knife. Well... I got to admit, ...

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Remember, spellcheck is your friend. Picture this if you will: you are walking in the grocery store and a whiny two-year-old is flailing his arms aroun and screaming, "No! No! ...