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Ask people! :D Contrary to popular belief, mind-readers do not exist and though we have a general idea that you might want critiques, a request is always nice. But yeah. ...

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XD I love Brad. Anyway, I can see why this is supposedly great and I can appreciate the lack of words and the strange meanings they come up with, but ...

I'm just going to comment on the grammar a little bit. The first paragraph has WAY too many run on sentences. So spit up the sentence and it should be ...

Wait... so you CAN'T publish anything that you've put on YWS?

Oh dear... lol. We have a couple of FBI members, but you're one of our first CIA ones! ;) Anyway, I've always wondered what an inkblot thinks about. Can you ...

I like my writing, if only because I like my characters and anything with my characters is something awesome to me. But for my poetry, I tend to close my ...

This is where I blink rapidly and wonder who the authors are of these books. *blinks rapidly* *wonders who the authors are* Anyway, I choose the bible. Because that is ...

Hehe, yay! I'm not alone! Somebody else who sucks at names is here. :) *huggles* Anyway, I too suck at last names, but I try to avoid them as much ...

Yes, it goes here. ^_^ Now... for the critique! The story was cool and the ending was pretty dramatic, so you get full points on that. I like how you ...

Ahhh... this is much better than the poem. As the others said, description is key in this story, especially in the setting. I know that, when I picture this story ...

Aww... poor Lynnie! Mind you, I think the introduction was a little bit too "woe is me!" but that could just be a preference taste, so whatever. In any case, ...

Heheh, yeah, the doctor annoyed me as well, but what struck me was how much he knew about everything, without being personally involved. It was kind of creepy. Could he ...

*moved to Lounge*

Right now, this is very very abstract. Why not write a poem that brings scenes from the real world into the abstract world? For instance, the only thing "real" in ...