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Still, the lovely thing about this piece is it doesn't rely on the gender of Jean. ;) (And yes, I thought Jean was a girl too, lol.) Found something else... ...

Of course you should post the revisied edition here. That way, you don't have people critiquing the same thing five times.

Some others that haven't been mentioned yet... Catcher in the Rye - J.D. Salinger The Red Badge of Courage - Stephen Crane Fahrenheit 451 - Ray Bradbury Slaughterhouse Five - ...

Isn't it funny that Winston would rather read a stupid long boring book about Big Brother when there's a hot chick by his side and they're lying on a bed ...

The ending should be "then" not "then." That typo just... slaughters the poem. O_o Anyway, I think at this point you're using too many adjectives or simple words to support ...

O_o Very special... and disturbing.

Aww... this was cute. Though I think it would be better if you introduced the music aspect of it earlier. ;)

Very informative! Still... one thing bugged me. You brought up two points in your first paragraph: that the modern church has problems with it and that the beginning church had ...

That's like, ten times your posts, author13. And three times as many as me. DUDE! :D Must I correct your math? ;) It's only about two times as many posts ...

Bulletin Board, I think... Anyway! Hello! WELCOME TO YWS! And yes... BBCode (not BBC ode, lol) is pretty nifty. I think you might possibly enjoy this place. (Possibly meaning YES ...

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Hello and welcome to YWS! :D As you probably guessed by now, we are kind of picky on spelling and grammar, so if you want to get any helpful comments ...

Awesome! :D Did you win Nanowrimo?

And here I thought you based after the real drama that made Pat Buchanan famous... ;)