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It's Incan!

*flails* Like... this has been the only story I've read completely on YWS and when I saw it updated, I hoped that either this meant: 1) You had updated this. ...

I have an imac, with the resolution as dull as I can get. Still, usually things are bright enough for me to see. ;)

Now that I read it silently to myself, the rhyming is much better. Still, when I was reading this out loud, most of the lines didn't run together very smoothly. ...

Uhhh.. maybe my eyes get way too distracted, but take away the asterisk, please. Once I hit that asterisk, I get jogged back to reality and... I don't want to. ...

My bad! :P Okay... It looks pretty cool so far. The one thing I noticed that, on your main page, you have these bright vivid pictures on the right (balance, ...

4/10... dropped what?

I always did wonder about how you became so good, and now I see why. Nice story. And good going in spiting that teacher! :D

...well, they DID agree to their terms of service. There are plenty of places that they can show their work without this mess happening.

XD This is a movie shoot, isn't it? Funny! And I love the line "speech bubbles" since it is so... fictional, and yet this poem seems very real. Nice job! ...

I'm... very right, lol.

Or we can give you advice on your own story? :P *Moved to Writer's Corner*

Hello and welcome to YWS! :D First of all, I want to say that your idea was very creative. It sort of reminds me of some of the stories I ...

Hahaha... that comment on the end is getting annoying. :P Anyway! I like the other poem better because it has more pretty imagery. This one... seems to be telling us ...

*Moved to Randomness*