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Eep. Yeah, if she truly is obsessed with language, you're going to want to make it much more prettier. Or startling. I don't know... it's definitely too plain. Try to ...

It's a little wordy, no? "it's been another bad week," you say with a slice, I would prefer the word "day" as opposed to "week." bleeding your broken words out ...

Aw, this shouldn't be rated R. ;) Okay. So I thought it was really really long. Add that fact to the one where it has boring imagery, it doesn't shine. ...

Instead of "of knowlage," it should be "of knowledge." Remember... spell check is your friend! I don't know... I think that these lines are rather redundant, as far as poetry ...

Aww... I love dog poems! A suggestion for you: you don't have to tell us your exact experience with the dog. In fact, I like it vague so that I ...

Beautiful or not, please stay on topic and critique the art. If you want to debate, do it in the appropriate section.

Glad you liked it! And I edited your post slightly so it would fit. ;)

72. Is "common" the official language of your world? Nope, English is. Because we haven't createst any other language. *coughs* Urethian? And, coincidentally, that language was made when I smashed ...

Hahaha... it's sad. Boredom is a beautiful thing, no? :D Just be glad you don't get my myspace bulletins, LOL.

Okay! In Incan's critiques, you'll find a lot of references to navel gazing. So what is this? Well, technically, it's staring at your belly button. That's very technical. So what ...

XD Oh dear... sick humor!

1. Does nothing happen in the first fifty pages? Haha... haven't written the first fifty yet, but OMG. I hope it's interesting! 2. Is your main character a young farmhand ...

Eeny Meeny Miny Moe. Simple. But yeah... I usually write in past tense because I like traditionally told stories. I will venture out to do present tense if I want ...

You can tell stories to others. Or something. But if you don't want to write, then don't do it. :P

For FREAK: I'm not writing it now, but I'm in the publishing stages, I guess. Anyway, I listened to Matt Drudge talking about genetically mutated humans and the idea eventually ...