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Haha... well, just remember that whenever you don't critique, smaur eats a kitten!

Two quick things... The grammar counts. Right now, you're dialogue grammar is mostly wrong. See THIS as a reference. If you have any questions, ask. The beginning doesn't have very ...

Yeah, but OBVIOUSLY you're not critiquing as much as you should! :D

Well, that just means you get to stay at home and spend more time on YWS!

Fortunately, we have this which is almost twice as good! :D

OMG, that sounds like an AWESOME domain name!

All additions /subtraction /multiplications/square roots…any kind of alteration to the song is welcomed. Thanks mew!! I say we should integrate it...

Hehe... well, I'm playing with it and seeing what I can come up with. But what I think I did was I edited most of the first chapter so it's ...

Nah... caffeine makes me ridiculously hyper. ;)

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Okay. I'm not sure WHAT'S wrong with it, but something wrong. Perhaps I need to step out of the paragraph entirely and have something new? Maybe... but this just ...

OR! NAVAR!

Aw... so sad. :( Just a few things to clean up: Yea, my foster parents. Should be "yeah." I’m not sure how I feel about remembering the orphanage. I was ...

Oh dear... Yeah. Now I must a really lame critic and say that I really did like this and I hope that you turn this into a novel. :) Two ...

Haha... well, at least you're honest about it. O_o XD

Only one favorite poet? *flails* Er... yeah. I like Spanish poetry. Silly, huh? In fact, the only reason why I leaned how to LOVE poetry was through Neruda. Yes... soy ...