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Lovely poem! Mind you, it seems a little unfinished... I think it would definitely be a good idea to delve further in the persona, just because it doesn't say what ...

LOL. I'm sorry, hehe. The science intermixed with everything... it's just so geeky, and geeky in a humorous way. Plus, the contrast between the caller and the scientific philosophy? I ...

Hey Emmy! Gah, I love the imagery that you use! I am kind of addicted to bacon, so for you to use that as a sort of opening just made ...

Hey Beff! :D Windsheild wipers

Awww! Dads can be soooo hard to read at times! Anyway, to the poem! I think the strength of the poem actually lies in the repetition of the questions, coupled ...

Hey jemjive! :D First of all, a couple of nitpicks! Do you know the feel?

Teehee! I love stories that are based on dreams... they're so crazy! :o Okay! So a few general comments, which hopefully will be useful! ^^ First of all! I think ...

Dun dun dunnnnnnnnnnnnnn! :o This sounds like a good writer's starter... that is, you know how you sometimes need to have motivation to write so you write something cheesy, yet ...

Awww! This is adorable. I'm sure your friend will love it. Just one thing! I may not be able to ease your aching heart Or the ability to take your ...

What a downer! I don't think you should kill Leander. I think you should revise that Greek myth... in any case, it seems to end too fast! You need to ...

Gah! Write faster, lol. The suspense is killing me! D: Part of me wants to say that you can spend more time talking about each of the preparations. For instance, ...

Woooooo! Okay, so this was the most boring chapter of them so far. :P Instead of having her think to herself, what if she thought aloud and Roxy kept interrupting ...

Hey Dante! So! This is the piece you were whining about! :P The piece is not the worst piece I've ever read. Really. I've read some awful poems. Still, when ...

One thing you might want to do is to make the first part in French and then have them be like, "Wait, what did you say?" "Oh, I'm sorry, I ...

Awww, this is a sad poem. And really, you do matter, more than you'd ever realize! Why? Because all our lives seem to touch together in a strange way and ...