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Hey Risfel! First, a grammatical comment! You do what I do! You skip words. For instance: "Now go forth....and let them [ahh, where's the verb????] that you are my horror ...

Why would he indeed! If I were a dragon, I would only eat her if I had a large quantity of teriyaki sauce. Yum! Anyway, first of all, you need ...

Aww, and I really wanted to look at this poem too! :) Aristotle, we don't allow uploads of powerpoints and we won't see powerpoints either! Try converting it to PDF. ...

Teehee, yes, but what does that mean, if it doesn't mean anything? ;) Anyway, you're repeating the same structure again and again in your short couplets! This is good... if ...

Hey Arahnia! This is a beautiful, still poem! And by still, I mean the synonym for quiet, not anything weird. It's pretty! I love how you begin with those first ...

Hey icanbefixed! :D Okay! I love your description of the silly boy who can make the narrator smile and laugh, and yet is completely oblivious to the obvious! I think ...

Hey Fairy! This was lovely! I loved, loved, loved the shape that you did! It kind of reminded me of this one Christmas tree poem... and this wheelbarrow poem... and ...

Hey Esther! You've listened to the song, so you know what it sounds like, but we changed the lyrics to smooth it out and get rid of the awkward lines ...

Hey Cherry! I would describe the "they" that you introduce in the very first sentence, just because I can't really imagine the cross through the desert. Also, I can't really ...

Eek, I wish this had a happy ending! Not that you can actually help it, seeing that this is nonfiction, but whatever. My over-idealistic side of me wants it to ...

Hey Mike! Try formatting it like this: Aaron is walking down fifty-third street where he saw someone at a garage sale giving away mysterious objects. He saw one thing that ...

Hey VioletJune! Haha... sleep dialing. I don't do that, but I do do a lot of sleep-deprived dialing! It makes for strange conversations. Anyway, higher education? Are they in college, ...

Control Room: ALARM SOUNDS. "The door's locked and we have twenty seconds to defuse this bomb, MacGruber!" "The name's not MacGruber... it's Snoink. Give me that tape." "No! This bomb, ...

Hey TheThing! This is a very stilted poem. That's fine and all, but really, I was hoping for more drama. You have a very square kind of narrator who seems ...

Hey Kanade! :D Hmm... I like the lines, but they seem a little disjointed as they are together! I would probably reorder the sequence of the poem to: I had ...