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Hey Eli! So! This story! This story is about poker! In fact, it's about a woman playing poker. Poker isn't really interesting in itself... it really isn't. What is interesting, ...

It really is quite terrible, yes. He's not the only one... there are many other stories like that. I know that on occasion, Nate will post some of these stories ...

Yay for dystopian worlds! Your teacher sounds awesome. :) I agree with Alteran! You definitely need more focus. And I say this with love! I hate to say this because ...

Hey Passion! Nice to see you back. :) Yep. Proofreading is your friend. Though I can totally understand if you make lots of mistakes... you should see some of the ...

Hey Stori! I don't know... I didn't really find this descriptive. It felt like you were trying to describe everything at once in as few words as possible, but I ...

LOL. If this were in WW2, this would never happen. They were too... I dunno. Hateful of each other? ;) Anyway, as far as stories go, I think I would ...

Cap'n! First of all, would you like me to move these to Fantasy Fiction novels? Right now, they're in short stories. Just figured I would give you a chance. ;) ...

Hey Jester! Two things! First of all, this poem doesn't really have a great rhythm. Yes, the rhyming is a wee bit off, but it's not bad. The problem is ...

Hey Emmy! :D First of all, welcome to YWS! Now, for your poem! Your poem is highly tautological. But I want more! Unless you are into tautology (which is entirely ...

Hey Pen! First of all, was this intentional? "Like your arm around my waste." Because I think "waist" would be more appropriate here, but I'm not sure if you're trying ...

Yeah, I think this would definitely work as lyrics. Of course, you would need to add more to it if it were lyrics, because obviously you would need a longer ...

Hey talentedwriter! :D There's this one poem I read about someone who complains to this poet that all he writes is about depressing stuff. It's called, Terence, this is stupid ...

Hey hobbit! I really like the idea that you had about words leaving scars beyond all recognition... it's really powerful! I think that you should develop this idea a lot ...

Hey Hydey! Okay! To avoid any confusion, I'm going to call "he" the person you're writing about and "you" the narrator. Just because. Anyway, a quick note, but right now ...

Hey kingolions! So! You're writing about fire... neat! There's lots of imagery that you can use and you can really make this poem awesome. :) My first suggestion is to ...