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Hey BFG! So I read this poem and, on the whole, I really like it! The imagery is fantastic and I loved the way you brought in the other senses ...

Happy sushi! :D First of all, a little typo! who's brains

Hey UnknownPoet! I actually really really like the ambiguity of the piece... it makes my imagination run wild. I'm assuming that there's sex involved. Why? Why not? :D Especially since ...

I disagree with a major point of this... you're a fabulous writer. So don't worry... it's not a lie. Really. ;) About everything else? I don't know if this helps, ...

Hey samasaurus! :D Nice story! Very touching. I like how she keeps on talking to Oliver... it reminds me of several widows, actually. Anyway, I would like to suggest showing ...

Hey Gryphon! :D I just found this, thanks to freudianlisp, and I just wanted to say that I really enjoyed this story and all the characters. Even though the Bookworm ...

Hey Sarebear! :D First of all, I really like the jagged feeling of this... the poem is written in such a way that it is evident that the one hiking ...

Hey babymagic! :D Right now, you've started at a rather odd place! Most people would start at the beginning of the battle scene, not at the end. Mind you, it's ...

Ooh, interesting story! :D A couple of things... I actually think that it would be better to start with a sex scene in the beginning. Why? First of all, it's ...

Ooh, I liked this. :D A couple of comments... I really don't like the hanging word that you have on every one of your stanzas. I would kill it, if ...

Hey Hannah! I just found this. Soooo... I figured I would critique it! :P The dialogue is rather bleh. I generally like to see more action in between the dialogue, ...

Hey Tenyo! :D Sooooo... this piece. XD Yeah, basically, life doesn't translate well to fiction. What was that cliche... "stranger than fiction"? However, I think that you're pressing a little ...

Hey confused.pirate! Interesting idea! :D Now! Let's make it poetic! One of the cool things about poetry is that it's like the Looney Tunes... anything can happen! So instead of ...

Ahhh! My worst nightmare! Nah, just kidding. ;) Anyway, this story was interesting! I don't know though... starting off with a dream sequence sounds like kind of a cop-out for ...

Hey stelagineva! :D I like your title a lot and the whole idea of being so in love that you just want to die... it's an interesting (albeit, masochistic) idea. ...