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Hey Howler! Babies are indeed cute! :D With that said, the one thing that I found kind of annoying about this poem was how self-centered it is. I don't know... ...

Hey Inkwell! The thing about this poem is that each stanza contains a completely new idea that you could probably expand into a completely different poem, if that makes sense. ...

Hey StoryWeaver! This is a really cute poem! Very Shel Silverstein-esque (trust me, that's a good thing!) so I really like it! Now, to make this more magical, I think ...

Hey Lancelot! Interesting beginning! I like how it dumps us right in the conflict... it's a good thing and I'm glad you're not waiting around for anything! :D One of ...

Aw, this is kind of a cute poem! :) To make it more geared for children (since it totally reminds me of a children's poem), try making this message more ...

My name is Sam! Sam I am! I do not like... Haha, just joking. ^^ A couple of things: Part of me likes the style, another part (the part that ...

Hey jackle! Welcome to YWS! :D This is a very packed poem! Which is a completely awesome thing, don't get me wrong! But you could write an entire poem out ...

Awesome story! I liked it lots... it reminded me of "Nosotros los pobres" for some reason. :) A quick story! Apparently, my grandma grew up in New York at a ...

Hey Lord Anzius! This story would probably best fit a movie! Right now, it seems really random that he suddenly dies and such... a great, action-packed scene for the beginning ...

Hey Elinor! So I never read "The Lightning Thief" so if this has something to do with that... well... I have no idea. :P However, I adore Greek mythology, so ...

Hey Lezalean! :D One of the things that I think would really make this piece stronger is by combining the narrative more effectively with the dialogue. I like dialogue heavy ...

Hey, L5! This piece is really confusing right now! You jump from a prison to a party, and it just doesn't quite make sense. Instead of putting everything at once ...

Nice advice, Trace! Some of it was right on the mark. :) The main critique I would like to give you is organization, organization, organization! You need to be able ...

Hey elfwriter! :D One of the things that struck me about this piece was the lack of focus it seemed to have! Although there was a lingering, unresolved problem with ...

Hey Winie! :D First of all, sorry for not getting to this piece sooner! Now... let's get to the critique, shall we? :) I really want to see some action ...