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Hey Twixt! I think you might want to get rid of the first paragraph, if only because it didn't really catch me and your actual human story was a lot ...

Simply put, it's rather boring and dry. There is so much character development in "The Giver" and it's a really powerful story. We learn to care for Jonas and Gabe ...

Yay! Math! :D I would say to geek it out even more. As one of the resident math tutors of YWS (yes, I know, I'm pathetic) I would love to ...

As this is a piece about a Christian's belief on God, I think the biggest thing that is missing from this essay is the actual text from the bible. There ...

Show, don't tell. This is boring. On a similar note, although poetry is about exposing truths of our lives, reading poetry that tells us this or that is really not ...

You might want to start up a blog! YWS has a very big blog system that can get you comments without the criticism that you would otherwise get when posting ...

This seems to be more wishful thinking than anything realistic. ;) I doubt people think to themselves, "Ah, if only I had acted my age, this never would have happened!" ...

Hey Yasmine! Okay! So Mike is a really big creep with a really bad reputation, so why should she go to his house? Even if he says that... it seems ...

Hey bubbles! :D This story (if it can be called that) seems more of a snapshot than anything. If you want to make it a story, if you want to ...

Hey JD! Very nice beginning -- I am definitely loving the rebellious, sneering attitude in the beginning! This poem has personality, and that's wonderful. The problem is, after the introduction, ...

Hey Lady! :D This poem could use a little less iffiness, if that makes sense. Right now, it seems like you're trying not to say something definitively, which is never ...

Hey BlueKangaroo! :D Okay, so I went to the Action/Adventure section hoping to find something that wasn't oozing of teen angst and fake conflict, and I found this . This ...

Ooh! What a fantastic story! And by fantastic, I mean it has wonderful fantasy aspects with odd, quirky details that make it all so much better! I totally "liked" it. ...

Haha, that is AWESOME. Is there any reason why your family, in particular, used to say "Rabbit Rabbit Rabbit!"? Or did the just say it? And what did your teacher's ...

Hi Aristotle! :D I would probably get rid of the prologue... it tells the reader what to expect, but as a reader, I would rather read something with tons of ...