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Hey Clan! Welcome to YWS! :D I had a feeling that this was going to be a religious poem, but I kind of wondered at the message. It seemed like ...

This reminds me of an exercise that we did in my physics class... the question was whether it was gravity or love that drew people together. And yes, we did ...

Haha, actually, this was pretty funny! In a weird way, of course, but still! I think that the narrator would notice what the head looked like more. When I was ...

Oh, nice! I like how you used all the senses in order to give a clear picture as to what is beautiful... it really helped give the poem a real ...

Hey Juggalette! Welcome to YWS! :D Your poem is a little bit strange! You talk about love and the other abstracts, then you say it isn't meant to be. And ...

Stop . using .... gimmicky ....... tricks ............. like ................... this. Not only do they detract from your poem, but they make the poem more about the gimmick than your ...

Hey Kate! One thing that kind of bugged me... your constant repetition of "dishwasher's bane" or "bane of dishwashers." You really don't have to say that all the time. :P ...

Oooh! I liked this! :D One thing... I really liked the subject and the way you put it and the questions you put in our heads, so that was fine! ...

As a side note completely unrelated to your poem, when you said "lamb" I was reminded of this: Yeah... it's pretty epic! It's an extreme herding sort of thing! As ...

Hi Eric! Right now, it seems like this poem is mostly made of a bunch of ideas that you thought were cool into a bunch of ordered phrases that you ...

Hey Jenny! So, this could be because I'm sick and I can't focus on much, but it was really hard to focus on your poem because you kept on going ...

Hi Alex! Welcome to YWS! :D In this poem, you show us a brutal image and keep on describing what is going on, but you never actually give us an ...

Wait! Warriors = Warrior Cats? Or am I completely confused? Not that I know either series, but still... One thing that I wondered about! Foxes are really shy creatures and ...

Hey Jame! Nice poem! At first I thought it would be twisted, a la "Man of La Mancha" but it wasn't! It was oddly sweet. There's just one thing that ...

Haha, yay for old works! It's all right, especially for a twelve-year-old! If you wanted to revise this and make it better, consider taking out some of the adjectives and ...