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But, but! Science is awesome! :P This poem reminded me of Walt Whitman's When I Heard the Learn'd Astronomer ... which is a good thing! I like that poem. However, ...

Hey midnight! Welcome to YWS! :D Nice poem! I like the beginning especially. One thing I noticed though.... the first part seemed to be addressed to the reader, which I ...

Eek! Cute poem!

Hi slandie! Welcome to YWS! :D I like the musings of love in the beginning. But... well... there are a lot of "me" "I" "my" in this poem. A lot. ...

Hi Jasmine! :D Normally, these repetitive poems with the same style repeating over and over again annoy me, but I actually liked this! It was cool and I liked how ...

Hey, Warrior Princess! :D Nice use of imagery and stuff... it's really pretty! Plus, the rhyming was fantastic. This is a really solid draft. Now, consider adding more about her ...

Hey Jynx! First of all, welcome to YWS! Mind you, you've joined like... two months ago, but seeing as you only have 9 posts, I haven't had a chance to ...

Hey Mel! :D Nice poem! I agree with all of empress's edits... that will help trim the poem and make it more readable without deleting any of the content... always ...

Hey Olya! Nice poem! I liked the lyricism of it and how it flowed. The rhyming wasn't forced and the descriptions were apt. Very good! The main thing I would ...

XD Ending = WIN. Anyway, what I would probably do with this poem is to make it lead a little bit better! Right now, it's really quite random... I would ...

Hey Lily! This reminded me of some of the poems that you would find in a book of children's poems. Nothing wrong with that -- I kind of grew up ...

Hey fixed! Welcome to YWS! :D I think my favorite part about this poem was the last stanza, where you started talking about (specifically!) what you would miss from summer. ...

Hey, herzing! Welcome to YWS! If you have any problems, feel free to contact me for anything you want. :) Ooh... you want brutality? Awesome! ^_^ Okay... quick nitpick! In ...

Hey Kat! Welcome to YWS! :D The spoiler part ruined it for me. xD Every time I started to read the poem, I would get attracted to that silly spoiler ...

I really think this poem belongs more in the dramatic poetry than the lyric poetry. :P However, you should note that as long as we each give a critique to ...