Snoink

I like the first version better. It has more of a surprise element to it that makes it more tragically beautiful because of the innocence involved. This version seems a ...

Oops! I forgot to comment on this. What can I say? I first read this over Grif's shoulder. :P Anyway, I liked this much better than "Death of a Novelist." ...

LOL! This is funny. I mean... Um... I think knives are funny. The first verse is thoughtful, the second is hilarious, and the third is overflowing with question marks. Too ...

Yay! A limerick. :) I would suggest taking out the exclamation marks at the end, because they make the piece sound a little bit too enthusiastic, and it ends up ...

I found it a little clichéd and soppy... but then, that might be good for your mission! At least it's not death poetry. Moving on! A mother is someone to ...

This seems a little nonsensical, but only because I'm not sure what a runway is, or what it would be considered in England, etc. So... um... help? However, I do ...

I like the first stanza the best because it's quick and short. Then the lines get longer. It seems a little bit more clumsily written... like you're going to a ...

I... um... have a confession. I was surprised at the ending. I didn't know she was murdered, etc. Which really scares me because the YWS folks seemed to know it ...

Er... does it have to do with "she"? I think it's really really abstract right now. I, personally, would like more details, because I'm at a loss of what you're ...

"Through a stained-glass window." I think this seems a little short... I would expand on it for just a little bit, maybe one more line. But, once again, you have ...

SEE? What did I tell you! *grumbles* Trying to hide your talent away... As someone who does her best to grow roses, I thought it was cool. It's funny how ...

XD I thought I had read this, but noooo... I liked this a lot. The meaning, etc. was so... poignant that it reminded me at once of those who live ...

Ha! I'm reading a necromanced topic! *does a dance* No, but seriously, the description is pretty at times, but sometimes it's overwhelmingly beautiful and it makes me want to reach ...

Oh dear... I feel like I'm getting more apathetic each day. This hardly did anything for me. :( But still... Why don't you send it to him anyway, just for ...

Ha! I liked this. This could easily be made into a depressing poem, but you didn't do that! Instead, check this out: i have always imagined nights like that: side ...