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Hey summerlovely! :D Okay, so this poem! It was mostly about this guy not noticing you and how you yearned for him, right? That definitely sucks... I hate having to ...

Yeah... I have to agree with Janika here, lol. I know you were very impassioned when you wrote it, but for some reason it seems pretty funny to me because ...

Hey flowerchild! :D Okay, so I need to run off to class soon (gack!) but I think the reason why you think the beginning is good and the rest isn't ...

Aw, of course they're normal for you! You're 15-years-old. You're allowed to have minor collapses every once in a while. ;) Now, as far as your poem goes... I think ...

Yay for people understanding you and such! :D Anyway, one of the things that struck me for this poem (and there were several things!) was that it was not really ...

Maybe pride falling from the heart is a good thing! I find that pride makes us do a lot of stupid things that we, in a more sensible mind, would ...

Aww... a sad poem about unrequited love! :( One thing that I noticed about this poem is that there are a lot of I's in it. I mean, there are ...

Whooooops. I critiqued the wrong one. xD Anyway, now I am on the right one! And yes, it is tons better! Good job editing. :D Also, you're not that bad ...

Hey paulop! :D Okay, so basically the review that silverkey gave you was really, really good and you should follow all the grammar advice she gave you! It's really helpful. ...

Eli! I am going to bug you about this, because if I don't, who will?! Basically, you need to do spell check and check your grammar. Just glancing over it, ...

Hey RileyJ! :D Okay, so I was reading your poem, and I think that it might start off better with these lines: I sat on my porch, unable to bring ...

I love the first stanza! I was free-writing the other night at an obscenely late hour (and yes, it was an obscenely late hour!) and one of the things that ...

Haha, yay for boring first chapters mostly about the details? I don't think the blob is necessary at all, except for your own private notes. I mean, it's what we ...

Hi HaydenSmith! This reminds me of a story I wrote several years back, so I am a bit partial to the topic already! :) Okay... just a couple of things! ...

Hahaha! Awwww. This is a story of unrequited love, definitely! Poor paper... it's going to take more than glue to keep them together. I don't know about you, but when ...