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Re: Drive On, She Says
Hey Angela! First of all, a couple of nitpicky things. At eight o’clock she leaves the gym (still looking like she just stepped off the red carpet) for the bookstore. ...
Mar 27, 2011 -
Re: Always the same.
Aww, this poem makes me sad! It's so true too. I kind of wish at the end that he would promise to be there, but sometimes those sorts of people ...
Mar 25, 2011 -
Re: Betrayal
Yay! I adore violent poems, so I am glad to see you writing like this. :) My main advice here would make it a lot more violent. Obviously, you have ...
Mar 25, 2011 -
Re: Girl From Daphnis-- Ch.2
Haha, Stella's kind of an overdramatic idiot at times. XD But Luca is awesome in a rebellious sort of way! Though I imagine that he's going to laugh at Stella ...
Mar 25, 2011 -
Re: Minders
JESSA! NO. You are not allowed to put this in the short stories section! You must put it in the novels section, and you will COMPLETE this story or I ...
Mar 25, 2011 -
Re: Rainbow of life
Hey cupcake! :D I adore rainbows, so I figured I should take a look at this! :) Anyway, one thing I kind of missed was there was no grand climax. ...
Mar 25, 2011 -
Re: Picture Perfect
This is rather true! It's kind of scary how the media warps our perception of beauty, especially with photoshop and the like! One thing that I would like is more ...
Mar 25, 2011 -
Re: My story.
I read this and my heart broke! I'm so sorry this happened! He sounds like vermin and nobody should be exposed to those kinds of people, especially in such intimate ...
Mar 25, 2011 -
Re: Of Science Fair Projects and Names
Hello! This was a fantastic little short story... I quite liked it! Very cute... and boy, did Lisa get Drew back! One thing I would like to know is what ...
Mar 25, 2011 -
Re: The Door to Heaven
Hello! :D I didn't see the title first, so when I read it, I was like, "OMG, IS SHE TALKING ABOUT HEAVEN? I BET SHE IS." Then I looked up ...
Mar 25, 2011 -
Re: My Thesis on Atheism and The Creation of God
Hey there! First of all, you need to spell check this! You don't spell "atheist" or "atheism" right, and while that's a minor point, it makes your argument look a ...
Mar 24, 2011 -
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Haha, this poem is awesome! Not sure why a tortoise would help a rabbit, but whatever! Anyway, I want to know who exactly is taunting the rabbit. You said rebels, ...
Mar 21, 2011 -
Re: Girl From Daphnis-- Ch.1
Wooooo! I'm first! :D Okay! So, since I have the feeling that this is a first draft, I am NOT going to slaughter it ruthlessly and make you not want ...
Mar 21, 2011 -
Re: Traces
Eek, this does need help! I think a lot of trimming might be really healthy for this. we like to wish for impossible things together--
Mar 21, 2011 -
Re: Rooted in Defiance
way. You didn't do that. You didn't do that. *reads again* :( Okay! Quick word lesson! :) apart = indicates a kind of split or separation. To be apart of ...
Mar 21, 2011
