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Ooooooh. Paul's "Trip." I get it! For a second, I thought he actually went to Saturn! But, really, wouldn't they kind of need proof that he actually did go to ...

Tangent! I love you! :) I really liked this poem, though I had to stare at it for a bit for it to make sense to me. What can I ...

Yay! This is definitely a lot better. :) One thing you might think about doing you might try not using the title in the poem. Not to say that using ...

Okay, so I have to wonder... why is your poem shaped like a madlib? Or are those they supposed to be something else? In any case, right now it looks ...

You mean that you wrote, not read! :D I don't actually get what you have to say. Lies can spread and jelly can spread, but eagles can spread their wings ...

Wooo! High fives! :D I like them too. :) One thing that I thought was a little strange was you started off talking in third person (a girl is doing ...

Wouldn't Mia notice that Jim was blind? It doesn't quite make sense! It seems rather obvious. I think this is much too rushed and there doesn't really seem to be ...

Not much to say about this, but I rather loved it. :) One bit that sounded interesting was the difference between the girl and the guy... the girl seemed to ...

This is a nice poem! :D The only thing that I might suggest is that you begin it in darkness... like, one of the best parts about the sunrise is ...

Hey Jojo! :D You see- every religion has got to have its Westboro(s) and Lakewood(s). But just because I'm feeling it doesn't mean that the action is good. I'm not ...

Hey Gracie! :D I don't know about this poem... it reads kind of like a children's book. Like, "Fruit is good. Fruit is healthy. Fruit is delicious." Something like that. ...

Ooh, this is nice. :D There are a couple of typos, so I am going to point them out! The sands of forever Sift and slide into tomorrow There is ...

Hi Azila! :D This part sounds a little off: I want to cool it! I want to cover it with icy fingerprints, to freeze it with my breath! I want ...

I know you wanted me to review one of your poems, but you didn't say which one, and this one is the most recent, so I'll be looking at this ...

I didn't quite like this. Your MC doesn't make sense to me. First of all, he's shipwrecked, and he keeps on making the usual mental contradictions (that was my purpose... ...