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Thanks for the link! :D I thought the format was a bit too repetitious... you know, the "When she..." bits. I would like to see those words only used to ...

Duuuuude. Your title is controversial, lol. I took out Griffinkeeper's message, by the way. ^^ The issue has been settled! Sorry for that mess. :) Anyway, one thing I would ...

Eh, this didn't do anything for me. I mean, I could see that you were going for the shock value and whatever by making the narrator almost bored and nonchalant ...

Hey Whisperer! I don't really like this. It sounds like you're accusing Japan of being ungrateful and bad and you made it sound like the Japanese deserved what happened. I ...

Hi Greg! This is only really interesting if we know what type of character Samantha has. For example, some people don't care at all that they're virgins -- especially females! ...

Wait! I thought the fox was an adult! Why did he have to stop prematurely with Gracie? It doesn't quite make sense. Wouldn't he at least go to the edge ...

Okay! So, I edited your work to remove the double spacing. Basically, if you want to remove the double spacing, you edit your work, then you scroll down, past the ...

Oy. Haven't read the first part but... He's a grown man at 32. Yeah, moms play a big part in our lives, etc., etc. But he's an adult. Most likely, ...

Ooh, I like the wistful feeling of this poem. :) One question I have... why do you capitalize every line? It's kind of odd looking and it makes certain words ...

Yay! Cupcakes! :D If there's any suggestion I would give, it's that I think the rule of three would be nicer here. So, basically, you would have three stanzas talking ...

Hey JRaye! :D One thing I would love for you to get into with more detail is what kinds of toys and games and other childish things geeks haven't really ...

Personally, I want to be a wookie. I used to make people absolutely hate me in my English class. They would be stressing out about their papers for weeks whereas ...

Hi madeofglass! Welcome to YWS. :) There are a couple of typos in there, so really make sure you proofread before you post! As far as the content goes, the ...

Your message is kind of blah, or at least to me. I've always considered poetry to be a bit of a revolution, so it's not enough (for me!) to just ...

Hey Jessa! I kind of hope this wasn't a real life experience! :o I hate failing tests! Anyway, a quick grammatical edit: These troubled times, no ones’ to blame,