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Hey Tangent! Did I mention that you were awesome? Because you are! Now, for your poem, I kind of adored the "My sister hasn’t spoken to me" stanza because it ...

Hey Smiley! :D Lovely poem! I like the positive aspects to it and everything... mommies deserve tons of love! :) One thing that you might consider doing is cleaning up ...

Hey Jennya! Thanks for commenting on my poem. :D And thanks for explaining some of the Australian lingo! I wouldn't have known it otherwise, being in America and all. For ...

Hey Mikko! :D It seems more like a summary of what you want to write instead of a story. I would keep this as a summary of what you're going ...

Hey disco! :D Okay, so the typos are absolutely killlllling your poem. So you need to take them out! And you also love to use pronouns, but you don't introduce ...

Stella! And... Stella writing?! OMNOMNOM. Anyway! I'm not sure if this is me misreading things due to sleep deprivation or whatever, but... are these people she's seeing not real? Because ...

I miss Grandma Rose too. :( One request... can you tell us more stories about what she did with you, personally? I don't know... I love these sorts of bittersweet ...

Just a quick note! Don't worry too much about putting it in manuscript format. Nowadays, publishers like it when you use the automatic formatting that Word has. The days when ...

Oooh, I do like this! I would like to see it a bit longer, but only because it's rather fantastic! I love your word choice and your imagery. The rhyming ...

It looks like an excellent introduction! The last line does stick out a bit and sounds a bit cheesy, however that's only because the build up is so good so ...

NO. The use of Mozart's Clarinet Concerto automatically makes the music 10/10. Maybe 11/10. I'm sorry, we must agree to disagree in this particular point. And yeah. This was an ...

Woo! Going kind of Simon and Garfunkel there, aren't you? Reminiscent of "The Boxer"! :) Anyway, I think this would be a lot spiffier in the Lyrics forum, since you ...

Hey Kafka! First of all, I don't really like the second person here. Next of all, you have so many destructive images together here that it's almost a hodgepodge of ...

Hmm... I think the poem is only powerful with the introductory paragraph. I think in the poem you may want to expand more on who these former quarterbacks are. Also, ...

Hm... I like your other poem better! This one seems a little bit too tame and unmoving, if you know what I mean! My favorite stanza was your second to ...