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Anyway! I think plotbunnies are cute and cuddly. Don't they bounce around and give writers ideas for stories? That's what I thought! In any case, I think you should EMBRACE ...

Ooh, nice poem! :D A couple minor changes I think would make this really neat! It's raining again. Why do I feel so sad when it rains?

Hi Lukan! :D This poem was pretty good and the rhymes weren't forced, which made it fabulous! They rhythm was a little off at times, so you might want to ...

Hi EternityRain! Interesting story. :) Nice characters too! A couple of thoughts! I think you shouldn't start off with talking about how she is an orphan, because clearly she is ...

Yay for Juliann coming to stay! :D As far as your poem goes? I think it would be super neat if you could talk about her kicking butt. Right now, ...

Ack! Tangent (and yes, it's really you!) these are soooooo good. I love them. I love how they build off each other, I love how they are haikus but so ...

Hi Matthews! :D First of all, your title seems to have an identity crisis! Is it Soiled Vows or Broken Vows? Now, for the rest of the poem! It seems ...

Yay! It's a little too blunt! I would probably trim it just a bit. Something like... her spine bloomed from her curved back like a mountain, of Emaciation Co. with ...

Oooh! Yummy! A poem! :D First, a typo! Too something about money and greed, how very apt

Ahhh! You know the way to my heart... multi-variable ecomonics calculus class? THAT IS SO COOL. Anyway! Keep you as constant;

Hi Kiicoh! :D Okay! So this critique is going to sound extremely nitpicky, but that's only because I really like the concept of your poem. :) Now! The first thing ...

Hey fruity! :D Eek! A cutting poem. That makes me sad. :( Hopefully, you're less pissed off now! As far as the poem goes! I like using pain in poems, ...

Hi Warrior Princess! :D Okay, so when I saw the title, I kind of squeed because it reminds me of Stravinsky's "Rite of Spring" and I rather adore that whole ...

I'm glad you're not depressed! :o As far as the poem goes, I think it holds a lot of potential! I mean, your character essentially watching someone die from cancer. ...

Hi Monument! I think this poem might have tried too hard as far as bombarding us with images. It looks more like a checklist than a poem because it lists ...