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Hi Maki! I changed the rating of this to 16+, since it had the f-word in it. ;) Now, as for your lyrics! I can see it as some sort ...

Hey Pen! Just a couple of things! Most of the time, this is a really cute romance! I love the scenery, I love how they're at the beach and just ...

Hi Jenny! :D I see that this is a romance novel! Yay! I've been kind of... addicted to those as of late, so I am really looking forward to this ...

Hi Lukan! :D Okay, so your poem! The first couple of lines are kind of weird. Like, it sounds like you're trying to use words to evoke some sort of ...

Eek! Genetics. I'll be taking my first genetics class tomorrow. :D Anyway, one thing I would really like it is if you could expand on it. Yes, yes, I think ...

Eek, sorry I am so late! I didn't see this till now. :( I'm going to make my comments general so that you can have some advice for your next ...

Hi kaiden! :D Oh my... the words "unedited" make me quake! But really, this was pretty good! I only found one typo: You see, it’s been a while since a ...

Hi BlackDahlia! :D First of all, you don't need to have the quotes... really! The neat thing about poetry is that narrations don't really need quotes. It's rather different from ...

Hi Demoness! :D One thing that I was wondering about when I read this... you said that they died for love, but I really couldn't see any love in this ...

Hello! :D For one, I really liked the uncapitalized style. If you did it any other why, I think it would look too annoying! At least for me. If it ...

Hey watch! You wanted me to look at this, so here I am! :D I looked at the small bottle of pills next to me and felt an icy shiver ...

Dun dun dun! I think I almost wrote a story like this a while ago. But, I was lazy and didn't want to start it. So I'm glad that the ...

Hey Pigeon! :D First of all, I would totally rearrange your poem to look like this! Walking down forty-second street There are a thousand, thousand feet; All of them marching ...

Hey Patrick! :D One thing I would like to see is a little bit more... conflict, if that makes sense. You kind of have the conflict set in the middle. ...

Eek! Love the idea with the Matryoshka doll. :) First of all! It comes seeking it's reflection