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Hi Emilie! You've gotten a lot of advice so far, so I hope I'm not repeating the other comments! I haven't read the previous comments, so I probably am. Sorry ...

Woo! You have a nice poem! One thing that I might suggest, if you're looking to improve this poem still, is that you should switch the first stanza (you are ...

Woo! I get to read an edited story! This is awesome. :) I guess this means that I should talk about the story, eh? ;) First of all! I think ...

Hey Cassie! I promised you a critique and, well, here I am! :D First of all! Very exciting stuff going on here! You have mad people attacking these characters... maybe ...

Teehee! This is kind of cute. :D One thing that I think would make this really good is if you told us what kind of movie she is going to. ...

Hey ilove! Okay, so I've been reading a LOT of romantic fiction novels lately, and this definitely reminded me of them, so yay! Now, this seemed like the ending of ...

Hey Jon! The comment in capital letters is probably the most important one, but I felt bad for only giving out one comment, so here's a full critique. :P As ...

Haha! I knew she was evil from the get-go! She didn't fool me, oh no she didn't! I think this is probably my favorite chapter so far, if only because ...

I do like the idea of running into the forest and just talking and be accepted as who you are. It's a very beautiful idea. :) One thing I might ...

Hmmm... I think I would really like to see a bit more conflict in this. Like, they pull over waaaaaaay too easily. An American family, pull over? Psh! Maybe they ...

First of all! I have never known a forest to be brightly lit. So you may want to change that! Second of all, HOLY CRAP. That was intense! I mainly ...

Hey Forest! :D This poem reminded me of someone who is desperately worried about something, but doesn't want to say what it is, explicitly, so she just keeps on saying ...

Hey! Just a couple of things first: the ones leading the pack doesn't care!

Tangent! You told me that you had another poem, so I ran to it because I LOVE YOU. Anyway, I like Today better than this one! This one seems largely ...

Ahhh! You are such a pretty poet and I love you completely and utterly.