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Hey Jigs! I read this all the way through and thought it was very interesting! Not sure why it hasn't gotten any comments, but whatever. I blame the lazy folk ...

Typo! Dawn is when the desert holds it's breath,

Hey Kiwi! :D There are a couple of things I don't understand! 1. Exchange programs are expensive! Why would the parents bother? Wouldn't they consider sending him somewhere closer to ...

Stelllllllla! I like this fairy tale rewrite! It's fun. :) Two things: 1. It seems unlikely that the witch would lock her daughter with Rapunzel. Maybe a reason for this? ...

Oh, and I have a question. You know this EE guy, yeah? When he writes his stuff, is he often drunk? :) YES. HE WAS. Anyway, you copied the weird ...

Hey Flower! :D Eek! It sucks having friends who want to commit suicide... trust me, I know. And it's absolutely terrifying to try to talk them out of it. On ...

Please keep comments considerate! :) I don't quite like this. You're using Christian imagery to evoke an erotic nature except... there is nothing Christian about this. Which makes it really ...

Gah! I love the beginning so much that it hurts. If I read the beginning from the bookstore, I would totally get it. Totally. This is awesome. This is where ...

Woo! I love it when people use these little nursery rhymes o their advantage in literature! It's always awesome... always! :D Anyway, just one thought... if the little girl is ...

Very nice hook! You are quite the writer now, aren't you? ;) I think Viviel is right... this does seem too short! Also, I think that he falls in love ...

Hey Sakura! This seemed to be less of a poem and more of a collection of proverbs or cliches. Not that proverbs or cliches are a bad thing (they aren't) ...

Awwww... a cute love story! I would probably get rid of the first paragraph... I like to be dumped into stories, so I would rather be sucked in with the ...

Hey emalily! I kind of like this! :D I can see it sung in a kind of country rock song by a female singer with powerful chops, which makes me ...

Hey Atticus! The repetition kind of bugs me. Like, for t he most part, it looks like you copied and pasted most of it for the last part, with minor ...

PSH. Zoe is such an idiot for not going with the obvious choice... which is Big Bird. Elmo is such a whiny little pot head. He thinks that Bert is ...