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Gah! I love this poem! The nature, the roses, the fantastical imagery, the grand scale scope of everything... in a sense, it's truly epic. And it doesn't hurt that my ...

Months went by; months of me missing SAT testing dates, and months of college deadlines passing me by without my knowledge. Never, ever admit to this if you don't have ...

Hey Allison! Welcome to YWS! Hopefully, you'll get settled down soon and start feeling comfortable enough to comment on other people's works. :) Anyway, I found this really abstract! In ...

Hey THsavedme! Welcome to YWS! :) One of the things that I think you can expand on for this poem is the ambiguity of it! What is consuming her? What ...

Hello sillyducky! I think you should start with the third stanza, actually, and get rid of your first two stanzas. They seem a little unnecessary! Also, and this may just ...

It's true! It's what my signature says, after all... where there is true charity, God is present! :D Unfortunately, God doesn't really seem to exist in this world... we messed ...

Hey imagine! :D One thing I would really like is if you could delve into the drama of this poem. Like, you hint of a forbidden love, but you don't ...

Hey Space Pirate! :D I kind of like this! It's a neat setting! One thing I would really like is more of a story. That is, you got the story, ...

Hello XJ! :D This seems like a rap more than a poem! Not that that's a bad thing... it just is, lol. Anyway, I would really like to see a ...

Hey Brooklyn! :D I kind of want to read the sequel where the guy would be totally suspended for inappropriate conduct, lol. Anyway, I find it highly unlikely that she ...

this poem is akin to stop and go traffic. I cannot tell you how difficult reading this poem is because I keep feeling like I'm jerked around so that the ...

I don't think bread knives are that good for killing people, actually. :P That aside! I think you can shorten the five stanzas that you have currently to something else ...

Hi silented! I think I would get rid of the first and fourth stanzas. They're just too cliched! Even if you removed on of t hem, the other one would ...

Haha, this is a cute poem. :) I want to write a poem here

Hey sillyducky! Right now, this seems more like a blog than a poem, if that makes sense. Like, you have all your thoughts down and you're trying to make sense ...