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Hello, it appears you are to be my victim for the day *mwahahahahahaha* lol Kidding. Okay *cracks knuckles* There is a lot of potential for this piece, if you expand ...

Thanks hun :) I can always count on you for a thorough review! You're awesome! Thanks again - and I am really glad that you're enjoying this piece.

*look to my portfolio to see previous chapters* Chapter Seven Inside Laura was screaming. This simply couldn’t be happening. Oblivious to her inner turmoil, Lamia continued with her speech, unaffect

Hey Ashleylee, sheesh you move quickly :) lol One thing I thought I should mention, most of this book has already been written, I am just copying and pasting from ...

thanks blooming phoenix

Chapter Six Upon stepping out of the shower, Laura felt her insides chill again and so she wrapped herself not only in a thick and irresistibly soft towel, but the ...

Hey Ally, This is my frist review of your work so I will try to be gentle. I found a looooot of redundancies with word usage. ie: Its sweet eyes ...

Hi Cat, welcome to YWS I have to agree with the previous poster. The thing this piece is lacking hte most is description and without it, I'm afraid, we as ...

Chapter Five The bullet hadn’t gone deep but it hurt like a son of a bitch. Heaving Candice’s unconscious form to the floor; bracing his wounded arm in hand, Sangard ...

Again Ashley, Thank you so much for the rave reviews. Fifth chapter will be up shortly :)

hello ashleylee - wow you've been busy eh? LOL Again, thanks for pointing out the errors. As for your question: The only part that kind of confused me was the ...

Hello Ashleylee Just a few answers to your questions: She's going to wait hours in a creepy wood to head back...? Umm, if that were me, I would be beyond ...

Hey Ashleylee Thanks for the wonderful review :) I am sooooo glad that you are enjoying the chapters. I will make the necessary changes to this chapter (although I tend ...

Like a continuation or a spin off of the concept of Pandora's legend. Could be interesting and depending on the angle either a thriller/suspense, maybe even a bit of a ...

Hello Moira, Just a couple of quick observations: 1) I think the fact that Jo is quick to call her father insane/daft/etc is tad bit too harsh, especially since it ...