SpiritedWolfe

Hello! :) To start off, I quite enjoyed reading this. I'm assuming that this is likely a side piece along with something larger you're writing from your description, but I'll ...

Hi ducklin! I was really enjoying your other novel, so I was interested in checking this one out ^^ What I’m curious about though is that this is meant to ...

Hi Yoshikrab! I want to start off by agreeing with Ducklin's review. I think she had some good points, some of which I've already said before so I won't spend ...

Hi Yoshikrab! Let's get into it :) First of all, I'm still not sure why Dakota's perspective is necessary. I've mentioned this before, but it felt especially apparent here. I'm ...

Hi Lionhero! Sorry that I haven't read previous parts, but I'll still try to give some broad input. Let's jump into it~ He had made a good impression and he ...

Hi ducklin! Sorry it took me so long to get back to this ^^ I wanted to make sure I had enough time to leave a good review. First of ...

Hi em! You've written a solid essay here, and I wish you luck applying to your writing camp! You've answered the prompt, chosen a solid memory to talk about, and ...

Hi Yoshikrab! Back again :) So, I'll start off this review by saying that I was quite confused. At the start of last chapter, I thought that all of the ...

Hi, Felistia! This has been in the green room for a while, and I apologize for not having read the other parts, but I'll still do my best to provide ...

Hi Yoshikrab! So, stuff is really starting to pick up in this chapter, and I like the set up you have going about Dakota and Silvan being in one location, ...

Hi again! Back to leave a review since it's still it the green room :) Unfortunately, I'll only be commenting on the first chapter because I don't have to time ...

Hi, coladonatorn! I liked the idea that you had behind this piece. This is a very real struggle that a lot of people have gone through, and that's a great ...

Hi, Yoshikrab! Back again for more :) Interesting that we've been introduced to another perspective character. I'm curious to see how he'll be incorporated in the rest of the story! ...

Hi shazueca! So, for a first chapter, I feel confused after reading this. I understand that you don't want to give away everything in the first chapter, but the writing ...

Hi Yoshikrab! Back for another review on your novel ^^ So, this chapter feels like it's broken up into two distinct parts. The first is Silvan's first exposure to being ...